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My Secret Past
2 reviewsI don't know anything of my past, I just don't remember and all I hope is that one day I will remember, remember what I'm missing, who I'm missing. Also I hope that in the end nothing will go wrong...
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My Secret Past
(#) CarcinoGeneticist 2013-03-26
Wait...WAIT.
HOW DOES SHE KNOW HALF OF HER MEMORY IS MISSING. LIKE WHAT IF SHE WAS ONLY MISSING A THIRD OF HER MEMORY. OR SIXTY PERCENT OF IT. HOW DOES SHE KNOW???
And the whole "He looked like me, except the guy version." Nope nope nope nope. We don't know what she looks like, so how would we know what he looked like?
Play with character development a little bit, too. She's going a bit Sueish, but don't worry, Eden/Alex will probably grow out of it.
Please don't give her sixty thousand middle names. Nope. It's a Suemark.
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