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Nation Building: A Taste of Honey
In the two years since the 4th Great Shinobi War, the world has slowly slipped back into chaos. Having had his dream of becoming Hokage taken from him, he sets out to reshape the world in much the ...
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The Pride
(#) HunterEternal 2014-08-19
Hmmm….. I'm not totally sure what to think of this. I mean it's really well written and the lemons are hotter than hell. But what's the motivation? Everyone keeps going on about how terrible Sasuke is and how he needs to be stopped, but nothing he's done suggests he has any sort of evil plan. And even if he does: why? He has no reason told be doing any of this. The only reason I can see is you're making him a bigger ass than usual so you can justify complaining about what an ass he is. That's a dangerous slope. The last thing anyone needs is another great author pissing away their potential on bashing. I'll stick with this but for now you're quite a few steps below Eroninja.Author's response
Thank you for the review. To be honest I feel that my being up front with my dislike of Sasuke as a character works against me here, especially as I let certain characters vent their frustrations with his becoming Hokage. That isn't character bashing, it's real life. Not everyone is going to buy into Sasuke having a change of heart. Some like Kiba would probably never forgive him for his past actions because I view the Inuzuka as valuing loyalty above all things. Sasuke betrayed his village and then you could say by taking Naruto's dream betrayed him as well. A character like Shikamaru is going to try and anlyze the situation and base his judgements not just on the present but his past actions. He's also aware his own negative feelings can color what conclusions that he arives too.
As to Sasuke's motivations well to be fair you don't really have an facts based in this story on which to base your statment that he doesn't have any reasons for his actions. In the manga he stated he wanted to become Hokage to correct the mistakes made by the previous ones. But what mistakes was he refering to, and how would he correct them? Plus in order to become Hokage he would have to remove Naruto as a contender and while he didn't have a hand in it directly. That he was able to move on the scandal does show he was putting the pieces in place and that's going to alienate some people who are friends with Naruto.
I know some believe that Sasuke's talk with Itachi changed him, but it is kind of hard to ignore the fact that for the entire manga only his goals have mattered and he's been willing to go through anyone that gets in his way. The current arc has shown me nothing to make me believe that this has changed. But rest assured that I know that due to my dislike of his character how I treat him is going to receive additional scrutiny. Therefore, I believe I have come up with a idea that isn't exactly the standard fare.The Pride
(#) heromtz 2014-08-19
Another great chapter, really does not cease to amaze me how the story continues to develop, but there are some issues that leave me uneasy regarding how to change Naruto's personality like in his way of acting, first, as was how he change his goals and objectives very fast, and we know that Naruto has the quality of never giving up, and the fact that he would give up on Sasuke has much to say, second, now we see that when choosing future partners, Naruto has no moral restrictions or ethics, for example Sakura's mother who despite her husband's infidelities, she continued to be faithful to him, but because pheromones Naruto like the sexual tension accumulated, it was easy to hook, but what if Naruto started to attract other women who love their husbands and have happy lives with them but are becoming attracted to Naruto and his primal instincts, he decides to take them despite possible marriages and broken families due to the actions of Naruto? For a more Naruto led by his instincts, is more likely to not feel sympathy for the rules of society in some cases causing more harm than good.
Anyway is still a good story I want to see how far you get it, just remember that good job and hope you can update soon.
Author's response
Thanks for the review.
To answer your question about how Naruto would react to a married woman, the answer can be found in the first chapter. But since it's not giving anything away I'll go into greater detail here.
Think of it this way, if the woman is truly happy with her marriage then the pheromones aren't going to break them up. Back in the first chapter Shizune noticed that some people react to Naruto's presence and some didn't. The reason for this is their idea mate might be who they are with which is why they are happy. But if like Mebuki cracks have appeared in their relationship well then they'll likely give in to the temptation and as such Naruto will claim them as his. This will be something further explored in later chapters.The Pride
(#) LeafRanger5 2014-08-19
Nice. I love 'Savage' Naruto here a lot. He's a badass.
And so Naruto has claimed a female Daimyo, and will soon get his 9 tailed vixen. I'm hopeful that Anko is alive and will join Naruto soon enough as well.
Sounds like next chapter will be Shion. That'll be excellent.
keep up the awesome work!The Pride
(#) Fenikagegami 2014-08-19
I'm curious to see Gaara's reaction, but I have a question. I can definitely see Naruto behaving this way as the Naruto's biggest core quality is his loyalty to his friends, after all that's why he put up with Sasuke's bullshit. So, I could see Naruto even wanting to burn the world to protect his friends, which he views as family. But, are what you saying in the authors note is that now he's willing to abandon some of his friend's? Or, are you saying that it's more along the lines of "I won't join Suna, Suna will have to join me" kind of thing. Or, is it that he's just not going to get as hung up on friendship should his former friends (like Lee and Chouji) come after him. I can understand his prioritizing his Pride but I can't see him ignoring Gaara when he's in trouble. Anyway good job on the chapter, and I think I see what's going on with Sasuke, he's pulling the Aizen villain thing, using the Good guy act to subtly manipulate Konoha into his image and I got a feeling its going to be reminiscent of Danzo's, but I've been wrong before about my predictions in regards to your stories so am excited to see what you come up with.Author's response
Thanks for the review.
The answer to your first question is complicated. It should be made clearer when we do see Gaara and Naruto together for the first time. But in a nut shell it would boil down to Suna's problems are not my family's problems. It's a tad more complicated then that, which the story will dive into.The Pride
(#) jupmod 2014-08-19
Okay... So Naruto will not form a shinobi village. He'll just 'protect' the territory of his Pride, the Land of Sun. Just how will this change the world for the better? I only see more wars in the years ahead as Sasuke and other nations will fight to get hid of Naruto and the Sun Country. The only way toward peace IMO would be for Naruto to seduce other women in positions of power, like Temari in Suna and Mei in Kiri. Yet if he's not going to do that, again how will he change the world?
Anyway, that mystery aside, I can see you're making Temari open for Naruto to add her to his Pride in the future. She's not attach to Shikamaru and Suna no longer allies with Konoha. I hope this is the case, given I like for Temari to join Naruto's Pride. :)
Well, Kayo is now part of Naruto's Pride. Very hot scene of her being fucked outdoors in the middle of the night. Quite erotic and romantic. :)
Next chapter I'm guessing would be Shion judging from the title of the chapter. I await for it. :)Author's response
Thanks for the comments.
Peace isn't Naruto's goal in this story. In my view after two years of trying to prevent the world from tearing itself apart even Naruto would eventually step back and say have at it. The Pride Naruto's goal is simply to establish a land where his family can be safe. If the rest of the world burns then so be it as it would be a path they have chosen.
As to Naruto seducing women let's just say that if Naruto takes a woman, then he literally takes her. This should be made clearer when one of your two favorite kunoichi is added to the Pride.The Pride
(#) Europefan01 2014-08-19
Excellente from this side mi amingo, the Lion and his mates began to make their mark in this world.
Now that's badass! EPIC to be precise.The Pride
(#) Leonas 2014-08-20
And now for the chapter I've been waiting for. And what a chapter. You exceeded my expectation which is saying something becuase they are pretty high. But THIS is how you do an explanation chapter. From how they pulled off the bounties, to settling down, to whats happening to konoha. You even explained why tenten and ino joined. Really good show.
I'd also like to say while it saddens me to see some of the kindest characters in the series (lee and chouji with lee being one of my favorite characters)giving into hate, it makes me happy to see that there is still a (small) faction standing behind naruto. Sasuke is also playing up the friend angle horribly. He isn't even playing it right. Now granted like you I don't like sasuke as a character (post time skip anyway. early on he was tolerable) but when naruto was in his position he tried to bring him back unpunished despite all the terrible things he did. Sasuke is trying to play up the "i don't want to but I have to" angle... which only a few are noticing... It's a simple kind of villianous act but it works here. We don't need a big villain liek madara with large over arching plans. For something like this a small time puppetmaster wannabe is all we need.
Great work i hope to see the next chapter soon.
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