(#) rachel032687 2015-02-08I liked this. It was a fun read. There were a few structural issues though.
EX: When you have her say she's never felt so good, you placed good before so (A cute way to fix that would be to have her laugh and correct the drunken admission). Also, towards the end where he tells her it was nice to meet her again, you have that a little jumbled.
Any way, thanks for sharing.
BTW, given that I reviewed, if you would like to return the favor, please check out my story Where There's Smoke...
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