- I give up ! Many of your storiess do have potential, though you must really work on your spelling and your grammar Two things though.
First these (...) are not good. This does not t emphasize your emotion or deed well and of course correctly.
Another thing so aptly demonstrated in this story is the lack of development of the charatcres and most importantly the abrupt endings.
The scenes are not even properly finished and THAT puts me off of reading your stories.
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