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Chapter 1 - Preparations
5 reviewsThe second blood war against Voldermort had come at a to high price and Harry and his friends have decided to do something about it.
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(#) jediprankster 2015-03-09
So Harry decides to undergo a ritual that will make him part animal, AND turn him into a girl? What reason could there be for either of those? You certainly didn't give one. That was the part where I lost any interest in reading.Fellowship of the Fox
(#) misteryman526 2015-03-10
Okay, apart from the stuff that jediprankster mentioned above, you really need check your spelling and grammar. You misspelled a lot of words, left articles out of sentences and you even misspelled the names of canon characters!Fellowship of the Fox
(#) DragonBard 2015-08-09
I thought it was interesting.
Then you said they were going to change past-Harry into a girl.
That's when you lost me.Fellowship of the Fox
(#) Bronze 2015-09-12
Nobody said this was to everbody's tastes. I thought it was good however, as jediprankster said you left words that really need to be included to have it make sense. So just be more careful and keep the rewrite going.
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