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L.I.D (Light in the Darkness) Part. 1
1 reviewA girl named Maddie Paws had never been the popular girl. She had always been in the darkness, until something unusual happened to her cat. (Don't mind any errors. I'll try to fix them all.)
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L.I.D (Light in the Darkness) Part. 1
(#) per-anders_staav 2016-06-05
Nice idea for a story, but I think it would be easier reading if you added more newlines. When the whole text is one long text without breaks you leave the reader without direction about when something news happens. This makes it harder for the reader.
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