- As always an enthralling chapter. I would have liked to see Greyback last a bit longer than he did in the fight, but that is a minor issue at best. Really enjoyed the blatent honesty when Lupin, Moody and Dumbles confront Harry about the murder. Very good job with the stark dialogue providing the atmosphere.
Author's responseIt would have lasted longer if Greyback had known he was going up against an opponent with quicker reflexes than his own, but he had never had to face that problem before.
- So Harry's come out into the open about his personal vendetta against the DEs! Good for him!
A child to Voldemort! I never saw that coming; that's a whole original twist to this retelling of canon. Another dark lord in the making?! THIS is something that complacent!future!Harry will never see coming!
Plus you've got me nervous about Tom's 'very desperate plan to end Potter's charmed life'. Oh dear.
- I found this chapter exciting. Thank you for writing.
Harry had easily last fifteen.
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Harry had easily lasted fifteen.
until there's some crises
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until there's some crisis
until there are some crises.
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