Categories > Books > Harry Potter > Lich
- Seems that you've made Harry powerful enough that achieving his goals now that he's back are pretty much just a matter of time. As such, if you do decide to continue the story, you might want to use this chapter as an intro that shows the end, while you drop back in time and tell the rest of the story from the beginning.
- This is a pretty heavy on the exposition. The reader is just supposed to take Harry's word and everyone's reactions at face value, I take it.
There are a number of questions: Why would Harry's friends be so rotten to him that he wouldn't regret abandoning them. Is he incapable of forgiveness now that his inner Harry is stuck in a psychic pebble somewhere?
Also, why would the Yuan-ti bother to teach Harry magic? Wouldn't they consider that he'd be mad at them for lichifying him?
- Hit the button too soon. He kills everybody? And here I'd been looking forward to seeing evil!Harry have to work with his hated ex-buds to get his revenge or at least learn how Ron and everyone reacted to the new Harry and how they'd gotten by in his absence. But Voldie's dead already, anticlimactic.
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