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Chapter 09.
3 reviewsNikki throws a birthday party for Lilee. DAMN I WISH THAT COULD HAPPEN TO ME!!!!!!! Anyways. That a-hole shows up and...yeah.
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A Beautiful Lie
(#) xxbelievemexx 2007-07-13
Obviously you don't know what making out is. It's full of tongues, groping and moans. I don't think Jared would be all.. "How cute." If it was his daughter. And some pointers, maybe describe more, and use puncuation and proper grammer and spelling skills. You have a great story going, and it has alot of potential.A Beautiful Lie
(#) xxbelievemexx 2007-07-13
Obviously you don't know what making out is. It's full of tongues, groping and moans. I don't think Jared would be all.. "How cute." If it was his daughter. And some pointers, maybe describe more, and use puncuation and proper grammer and spelling skills. You have a great story going, and it has alot of potential.
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