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The Suicidal Immortal 2
(#) Ithilwen 2006-10-23
"if I can't fix you I'll send you straight to techno hell, get a new computer and place your fucking remains right next to it as a warning."
(snork!) Reminds me of Good Omens, when Crowley puts empty pots next to his houseplants to make them grow.
So Derek didn't even try to mention that he got skunked?
I think these slipped past spellchecker:
"he felt their loose." loss
"It had bee over a week" been
"Run in" is supposed to be run-in, when used as a noun.
"ass-end of the stripped mammal" striped
"computer room ha passed through" he
"empty dish washer" dishwasher
"fill dogs water" dogs'
"the computer data he wrote down before coming to work" the computer data that he had written down before coming to work
"he was laying in a hospital bed" lying (If Derek had been laying, I think he would have been much happier.)
"Derek had managed to escape without any serious bones." Any broken bones? Serious injuries? If he doesn't have his serious bones, then how can he lay in that hospital bed?Author's response
Thanks I was so tired that I completely forgot to proof read this one when I posted it. I’ll go back and fix it. I appreciate your sharp eye as always and hope you are enjoying the story.
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