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Within the Darkness
3 reviewsShe walked down the abandoned work road, even though the moon had vanished from the sky, she could hear movement around her... Partially based on a real event
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Within the Darkness
(#) GR21 2006-12-04
unlike some assholes i actually liked the story. it was slightly confusing but otherwise it was originalWithin the Darkness
(#) RenoTurk 2006-12-12
I think that it's okay. I don't think it needed such harsh words either. I won't say it's bad but maybe you could adapt it to third person, put a little more description in about the character. That should really perk it up :) Keep going. You can only get better with practise
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