- This is lovely! I think you managed to capture both characters well, and the structure of the fic was suitable. The only little niggling thing was the in-text Japanese translations. I thought it was a little too heavily used and a tad distracting. However, using some Japanese did add to the authencity of the overall story. :)
- This is lovely! I thought you captured both characters well. The structure of the fic was suitable too. The only little niggling thing was the overusage of in-text Japanese translation, which got a little distracting. However, some of it did add to the feel of authencity of the fic. :)
Author's responsethank you! maybe i would have time to fix it someday to make it less distracting, but thank you! glad you liked it :)
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