Categories > Original > Horror > The Shallows
There have allways been rumors, about the local lakes, and rivers containing creatures, that are waiting for any ignorant swimmer to cross their path. This is one of those stories.
-1Illiterate
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The Shallows
(#) Kellyconcarne 2005-07-31
First off, thanks for giving DSB it's first review! XD That made me feel sooo much better.
Second, I like the way this story is starting out. I think this could be really interesting and I plan to keep my eye on it.
However, I think you should go back and beta check this sucker because it's all one giant paragraph. ^^ That and there are a few spelling errors. I hate to sound like an English teacher but I'm just bringing it up because it sounds like a really good story but with those kind of errors you could scare people off!
Overall: Great start of a story, fix the bugs.
Author\'s Response: Yeah, I looked at it again, and saw the bugs, and swore up and down. The spelling errors happen, when I speed type. The reason it is, the way it is..is because I uploaded it from wordpad...-_- Thank you for the review.The Shallows
(#) Togot 2005-08-11
Dude get spell check and learn how to use commas. Other than that it seems interesting
Author\'s Response: I do have spell check. and I use it...The Shallows
(#) Aura 2007-08-19
I like this. very interesting.
Am going to read the other chapters that are up.
Peace
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