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Mary & Ellen
21 reviewsThe Heir of the Founders, the Heir of Merlin, needs to set the future straight -- by going back to 1971. In this chapter, the first visits.
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The Younger Potter Twin
(#) red_jacobson 2006-12-02
i'm starting to really enjoy this story; mainly because you have gotten past the now obligatory Wizarding Political setup that has been in all your other redo fics; and is moving in a new direction. Don't misunderstand me; I liked your other redo stories; but, reading the same thing over and over got a bit old GRIN
I also like the way you are building up Ellen's character, and, by virtue of mentioning that she was killed in the original timeline; avoid the possibility that Harry would prevent a necessary character from being born, if i'm making sense.
Anyway; thanks for the fast update schedule and looking forward to what happens next.
redThe Younger Potter Twin
(#) Treck 2006-12-02
"In the meantime, stop showing off," Harry said. "Stop trying to get her attention. Trust me, you've got.
You've got IT.
Great update.The Younger Potter Twin
(#) matthiasblack 2006-12-02
The story is coming along quite well and I am sorry for not reviewing for a while. I was doing some major cramming for tests and now exams but took a break for some self reading. I see I chose wisely in your fic and wish you luck in finishing it.The Younger Potter Twin
(#) Meteoricshipyards 2006-12-02
Loved Harry's contrasting his pranks to James'. Hope James learned something.
The conversation between Mary and Ellen was good too. I like the relationship developing between Harry and Ellen. Good job.
Thanks for writing this.
Tom A.The Younger Potter Twin
(#) Toto 2006-12-02
I really like this story, even though i am always wary of Good!Snape. I just have trouble believing it, however well done it is.
Great work.The Younger Potter Twin
(#) loralee1 2006-12-02
I've been thinking over the concept of 'houseroom' from the last chapter and had the thought that the term could be some of the problem with Dumbledore assuming all would be well in the Dursley household. He asked that Petunia give Harry houseroom and they had two different meanings in mind.
I love the thought provoking ideas that you come up with thank for sharing.Author's response
I hadn't thought of that, but you're right.
"T"The Younger Potter Twin
(#) BJH 2006-12-02
That was an excellent chapter. No action but still excellent. Some of your best work and I've read all of it on all the sites.
The initial interaction of Harry and James had Harry a tad preachy and it seemed like he was almost too manipulative, trying to change James rather than just show him his own faults so that he could improve himself, but not overly so. Harry was totally in character.
The conversation between Mary and Ellen however was spot on. You showed some fantastic insights not only into Harry and Mary's understanding of him but also into Mary's acceptance of him as truly her own, be it son or grandson. You had Ellen being insightful but not more mature than we should expect. They both understood who Harry was and what he had to do even if they did not give, or even have, specifics.
I am truly looking forward to seeing how Harry and Mary's relationship grows.
I also still love the Peter Pan analogy for Lily's feelings, intricate yet easily communicated and understood. A terrific analogy.
I was, at first, a bit put off by the shifts in timeflow as you show how certain actions would evolve, such as the Snapes and their new financial potentials, but it was well done technically and did not spoil any of the future plot that I can see.
Again, a really great chapter!
BJHAuthor's response
Thanks for the thoughtful (and positive) review. And of course, my characters often tend to be a bit Hermionesque. . . .
"T"
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