(#) xelhaspixiestix 2005-05-11This was very, very well done -- especially the background about the former-Ox, and her journals. You might want to flesh out the Yuki Haru interaction, but then that might just be me and my opinion of Haru. But still -- very nice.
Author's responseThanks! Yeah, I wasn't sure when I wrote it how far it'd go. But then Haru got to Yuki and got the answer that he needed out of him, and all of the tension just sort of...disappeared, and I figured that was a sign to leave it right there. :)
- i thought that was lovely. and i agree with your decision to leave the exchange between yuki and haru as is. sometimes it's better to just let a few words begin the scene that the imagination will fill out in full color on its own.
Author\'s Response: Thanks. I'm glad you liked it. :) This was a story that I picked at in bits and pieces, and so I've never really gotten a good feel for whether it felt "done" or not. Thanks for the input. :)
- That was very...I'm trying not to use the word "insightful," but it does describe it very well. You look into Haru in an original sense, and created something wonderful and thought-provoking out of it. Very well written. And I loved the exchange between Haru and Yuki.
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