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Independence Day
(#) Alorkin 2006-12-29
This is a great start! Normally,
'Isolated Harry' stories are pretty much formulaic, with the only variations being in the specifics. So far, in these first two chapters, you have introduced several interesting twists. Harry's discovery of his imprisonment by Dumbles is par for the course, but his subsequent finding and then using his father's Auror manuals to eliminate the tracking charms, is not. His slytherin side is peeking out, and, of course, the BEST ship! Harry and his beautiful brown-eyed girl, Hermione. (I don't care what's in book sux! Thbbbbbtttt!)
It's interesting, but I use the relaxation/meditation technique you described in the second chaper. I teach it to my daughter as well.
Some may see your version of Hermione as OoC, but I think that for a fifteen year old girl(or sixteen, if one follows HAP), she's just right. No teenager should be as staid as canon Hermione is!
I have placed this on my 'alerts' list, and hope to read more soon.
AlorkinIndependence Day
(#) Rubel 2006-12-29
Neat. While it's a concept I'v seen before you are doing a good job with it. Keep up the good work.Independence Day
(#) Dragen 2007-01-02
What a great second chapter, Harry is planing to run away from 'home' and go to Hermione's home...
The ass put some magical blocks on Harry, to make itr hard for Harry to cast spells and that.Independence Day
(#) Skoell 2007-01-06
why can't every mother of attractive girls give their daughters such a good swimsuit advice??
that's just the cruelness of life...=PIndependence Day
(#) merle_c 2008-06-29
Good chapter. I was left wondering why a starving Harry wouldn't grab a snack on the way out after the phone call. Perhaps that it the optimist in him? Glad to see that Harry can apply himself (re: auror training manuals) and is going to do something about his situation.
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