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Patrick and Ava have a 'miscomunication'... oh the joy.
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The Mistake
(#) LaBellaMuerte 2007-01-12
two words: fucking awesome, cant wait to read more. AJAuthor's response
Yay! I love both those words!The Mistake
(#) luckysgc921 2007-01-12
uhh...Ava needs to start putting 2 and 2 together to get 4. Matthew was holding her phone..and then her phone was on silent. dun dun dun. He's very against her being with Patrick. I think he wants her. I think she needs to kick him to the curb, best friends boyfriend or not he's getting a little creepy.
great chapter though. yup yup. I loves it.Author's response
hm, yes, Ava probably IS a little dumb when it comes to boys... glad you like it!The Mistake
(#) Frenchie189 2007-01-12
Ewwwww!!! Spiders!!! gross shivers anyway I loved everything else please update soon.Author's response
Yes, I hate spiders too... especially in mass amountsThe Mistake
(#) -LoVe-CaNt-SaVe-YoU- 2007-01-13
omg i am scarred shitless of spiders!!
i got shivers just thinking of them!!
i have suspicions that Matthew isnt all he seems, but i am usualy wrong with these things
Cant wait for the next update!!!Author's response
Oh yes, spiders are horrible creatures! And I must have extremely transparent writing with Matthew... or DO I??? ;)The Mistake
(#) FrostedGlass 2007-01-13
My good lady, there was one comepletely bullshitty thing in this chapter: You saying that the last chapter was crap. :P
I rated this as "exciting" because there's this spider attack thing which is probably the work of the murderer AND Matthew. What's up with that twat?
Bravo. Bravo. :) The story just flowed in this chapter!Author's response
You are too kind...The Mistake
(#) riaryder 2007-01-14
Uh, hello? Earth to Ava! That Matthew is a bad 'un.
Great chapter, twisty turny, suspenseful and intriguing.
Can't wait to find out what's next. Have a point, lady.Author's response
Ooo... Thank you for the lovely point. I shall cherish it always...The Mistake
(#) whatkatydid 2007-01-15
Don't trust Matthew one iowta....this was agreat great update! You rock!! The whole miscommunication between Patrick and Ava, that was so sad but kinda comical too, like exactly the type of thing that would happen when you're so desperate for it to happen!!
And I nearly freaked out when i saw the spiders....ewwwwwwww! I freakin hate 'em. Seriously.
xxxxThe Mistake
(#) CoraLiz 2007-01-17
You keep toying with my emotions, Gwennie. Stop it!Author's response
You know how I feel about 'Gwennie'...The Mistake
(#) valleygal208 2007-02-04
Haha...her phone was one silent...I just wonder what she used as an alarm clock to wake her up in the morning??? I LOVED this chapter...upsetting, comical, creepy, suspenseful...it had all the elements! I agree with some of the previous reveiws in the fact that Matthew is in love with her...hugging her at the concert, putting his hand over hers, hell, taking her to the concert in the first place...even though his excuse is because it's the friendly thing to do...it's totally because he likes her!Author's response
I think Matthew probably woke her up... either that or she used the hotel's services. They're good like that. And I'm so glad you LOVED this chapter, but I'm not giving you any clues about Matthew... you'll find out soon enough.The Mistake
(#) ssketchator 2007-06-01
First, didn't Matthew have her phone?
Secondly, EEEEEEEWWWWWWWWW!!!!!
I effing hate spiders. Ugh. I'm kinda shivery and nauseous right now, thank you.
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