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The Mistake
(#) moocow 2007-01-15
i'm not going to be able to sleep.
thanks.
spiders. geeze.Author's response
Truely sorry. It's its any consolation, I probably won't be able to either...The Mistake
(#) luckysgc921 2007-01-15
dude.
ew.
ick.
blah.
shiver
i liked the chapter but I kept praying she was gonna wake up from like a creepy crazy bad dream. Spiders squick me out man. I'm so examining every inch of my bed before laying down now.Author's response
Just try and tell yourself: spiders are afraid of YOU. They aren't likely to be in your bed or anywhere you go on a regular basis.... Okay, I'm scared shitless of spiders so I'm basically convincing myself as well.The Mistake
(#) FrostedGlass 2007-01-15
The explanation of Ava’s hate for spiders was mighty fancy. Super! I feel the same way about birds. The jerky motions hold true for them, too. Yuck.
swallows down a lump in her throat Top-notch work on the spider-scene: Suspense. Excitement. One-noun sentences.
This chapter was just incredible. The flowiness. The emotions. Which made me advance to two two-word sentences.
Please, not even the FOBz could have made this chapter any better. You are awesome. And that’s a fact.
I have been wondering: How did you come up with “Lemmings”? Cos that is one cool last name. :)
Update soon. It always makes me squeal in delight.Author's response
Yes, I could see how birds would be scary as well... stupid jerky movements.
And I don't really know how I came up with Lemmings. Normally when I create the characters I just think up a first name, then when it comes time to say the last I'll just put down whatever is on my mind for that moment. Ava Lemmings just seemed to fit. But who knows. Maybe I heard someone say it somewhere...The Mistake
(#) Frenchie189 2007-01-15
Oh god. I'm itchy now.. I hate spiders.. AHH!!
But still I love this story please update soon.Author's response
I'm itchy, too. So sorry! But I'm glad you're still reading the story in dispite of the uncomfortable-ness.The Mistake
(#) -LoVe-CaNt-SaVe-YoU- 2007-01-15
oh my fucking god!
i cannot stop scratching now...
no seriously i cant !! :[
Exxxccccccciiiittttttttiiiinnnnngggggggg!!!!!Author's response
Sorry about the scratching! I know how you feel!The Mistake
(#) riaryder 2007-01-15
You can totally tell you hate spiders because the fear was so realistic. Brave thing to do, lady. Hope you don't have nighmares!
And what is with the cliffhangers in all the updates today? Damn you all keeping me waiting! :-)
Oh have a point for bravery. Or something else they actually offer.......Author's response
Yes. Spiders. Evil. Yuck.
I'm still imagining I see them everywhere. :)
Sorry for the cliffhangers! I noticed everyone else's as well. Everyone is going for exciting, I suppose. And thanks for the lovely point!The Mistake
(#) whatkatydid 2007-01-15
Argh! Gwen! Amazing! Look. my . Sentences. are. again. disjointed. this. means. I'm . excited!! argh!
I'm pretty sad she got bitten an all but damn! This was nice work! You deserve all the ratings you get on this and all the reviews, I appreciate how hard it is to work through chapters and the effort we all put in. It totally pays off, and FOB would be totally proud.....yeah!! YEAH!!!Author's response
You are too kind, Katy. But thank you for all the positive reviews (and points... oh la la)!The Mistake
(#) CoraLiz 2007-01-17
I hate you. Spiders? Really?
Now wright something happy please. I know how you feel about writing love scenes, but I don't care. Pull yourself out of your "I don't believe in love" phase and get to work. Seriously.Author's response
I hate you too... find me a boy and maybe I'll believe in love again. (Preferably a CUTE boy, Cora!)The Mistake
(#) FallOutGrl 2007-01-17
OMG I HATE SPIDERS!!!!! ICKY!!!! bleh!!!! as i was reading i was constantley scratching and everything!!!! ewwwwies!!!!!!! ick ick ick.......good enough chapter tho.......by the way i was wondering........could i be in your story with Pete??? you dont have to but it would be so cool to be included in one of my fave stories ever. but if you dont want to i understand. :D thanks for listening to me. and keep up the good work! and no more spiders!!! ick!:PAuthor's response
Oh sure, I'll add you, no prob. I love the cameo thing! Any specific little details I need to include about you? I'll check out your profile for clues. If anyone else wants a part of The Mistake, just let me know!
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