Categories > Original > Poetry
- Interesting freeverse. The speaker seems to switch from wistful longing to a mild arrogance (in the second stanza) to a bit of a sad realization and back to wistful again. I think the second stanza stands out as being a bit different in tone from the whole piece. Not sure if you intended it to be that way.
Still, I thought this was well-written, though a bit average in terms of imagery and being moving.
Author's responseThanks alot for reviewing. Your the first person that has actually givin me postive critisism. O and yeah didn't completely do that intentionally but this poem I wrote about a certain guy so the imagery is actually basically what I see. But I can understand the average I actually got one of the lines out of a song. tehe. cheating yes but it works.
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