Categories > Books > Harry Potter > The Heir
- While not exactly original, it had a lot of ideas from other stories, it was still a good story, if a little rushed. I do like the idea of a more relaxed Hermione while she is at home though. Overall, it was a good summary of a last book, the sniper rifle is also a good addition, I've seen a few stories do that idea.
- An enjoyable read, though somewhat rushed in spots; I suspect it could comfortably be expanded and fleshed out with a few more chapters, at a minimum.
I did enjoy the depiction of the "at home" Hermione and she certainly seems plausible as I could see where she'd be a bit uptight and driven in the wizarding world. An expansion and/or a sequel would be worth it if the muse strikes you.
- A nice little one off. It was interesting to see a glimpse of Hermione at home. For that part alone, it might be worth revisiting in more detail. It would be quite difficult to come up with a novel way for Harry to beat Voldemort at this point, but the quick, methodical sniper on his way to the hospital to see the birth of his child is an excellent one in my opinion! Thanks for sharing.
- Nice. Why not have them have a daughter while at it? But instead of having more violence such as DEs going after more people, why not make it more relaxed such as where they continue to live their lives together with their son (and daughter if you decide to give them a daughter) leading to their kids going to Hogwarts and becoming quidditch stars? I hope there is more chapters to this to come.
- Before you can expand on this you'll need to rewrite it as everything's already happened. Well except for the killing of the Death Eaters that is. And they do have to go!
If not they'll simply await next idiot to decalre him or herself the Dark Lord/ Dark Lady and the whole stupidity starts again. However, Harry should claim ALL their assets as spoils of war. Leave them so broke they can't even pay attention. This is a good story and I wouldn't mind if you expanded on it. But that is entirely up to you as the author.
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