Re-done chapter 1! Harry decides he's had enough of prejudice and manipulations, and makes his world the best it can be while playing political games with professors and Death Eaters alike.
- Good start. Though I hope for a bit more of an explaination -- especially the reasons by Harry forgiving his guardians.
Would love for the Dursleys (due to Vernon's "lack of exposure") to exposed to a bit of Wizarding-culture -- maybe seeing Diagon-alley or Hogwarts... perhaps even meeting someone as bigoted as Vernon, but the other way around -- like the Malfoys.
Keep up the good work,
(#) brazilianpimp 2007-02-17The story is alright I suppose. I'm really not one for this type of story but i can handle it. one thing really confused me... you put the X rating in a G rated story...those two dont go well...
Author's responseI know, I've a bit of editing to do on the parameters of the story. Glad you can 'handle' it, even if it's not your type of fic.
(#) janeaverage 2007-04-06This is really interesting, but the whole thing seems rather sudden. It would greatly improve the story if you had some buildup to the family's change of heart. However I always like to see Harry and Dudley developing a relationship so I'll take what I can get ;)
Author's responseThanks! It's cough actually my first fanfic, so I did the typical novice thing and pushed it to get it to where I want. Now I'm slowing things down...
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