(#) Geovanni_Luciano 2007-02-24Again, another chapter down, however I'm finding myself saying, are we there yet? It's coming to be the plot that never ended, and I'm wondering what the plot is. At one point it was the girl and her little boy, and now that that was done and over with it keeps going. I'm curious as to when Luna will reply, if at all. I'm curious as to whether it would even be a salvagable relationship that almost happened. This chapter was alot shorter than previous ones. I don't mean to be critical in my review but it was just a little disappointing.
Author's responseThanks for the critical review. Had I avoided the Karina and Chico storyline, I would already be on the sequel. Still, I think it was important for the development of Harry as a character. This chapter was shorter, but mostly because I didn't wish to press on past Sanchez's death. This story ends in 4-6 chapters. I'll take a brief break from the bungleverse to finish Darkness and perhaps the Lie I live before starting the sequel. Sorry it may have seemed disappointing to you, but I consider it some of my finest work.~Jim
(#) DavidMPotter 2007-02-24Another brillant chapter. I do hope he and Luna can make amends. I also hope the supplies make their life easier, I know dumbledork is having a cow, I wonder how he is responding to the loss of control.
Author's responseAgain witht he limited perspective, Harry won't know the answers for a while. They are out there. I promise that.~Jim
(#) whatareyouevensaying 2007-02-24Yep, things are definitely getting tougher. I knew either Collins or Sanchez would be the first to go, now I'm just waiting to see if there'll be any others.
Did the characters call the Goblins "Gobs" in previous chapters? It really seemed like that bit of slang came out of nowhere.
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