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Artemis's parent droped a bomb shell on the mastermind six hours ago and now his whole life has changed. New people, new home, new everything; how will the young genius handle it?
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Untiled(for now)
(#) water_dragon 2007-03-16
i must say Amy is taking it very well, i'd be screaming and cutting myself... damn i have a temper!Untiled(for now)
(#) Hechu 2011-12-10
Um...... not the best fic I've ever seen. One Artemis would never do anything he didn't want to. Two he would have found out through his control of the Fowl Empire for like three years. Three his mom would have dropped something about it when she was a bit out of it after his father was gone. And four the writing style isn't that good. No offense meant it just isn't that good. I recommend some severe editing.
Oh and what's a "fiancA (C)" Um... what? It would make more sense if you had gotten some reason for it like her family is another powerful trading/illegal/rich family empire and this is some allegiance between them. Oh another thing that would have made this a bit impossible and now I'm talking to myself is that Artemis Sr. would have not accepted a marriage with a family involving in illegal stuff because after The Arctic Incident he promised to be entirely legal.
Again I don't mean any offense I just think that this could have turned out a lot better. Right now it's a bit rough with an unformed idea. I would be happy to see if I could help you make this work if you ever need any help with it.
hechu
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