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Light within the Darkness
1 reviewYou'll have to read to find out, but this is my original story apart from the Kingdom Hearts characters. You'll find that I've made some changes, too. So please, if you would, rate and message me a...
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Light within the Darkness
(#) Ryter 2007-03-06
An interesting AU, I'd say. Not quite sure what's going on yet, but that's typical of a first chapter.
My only real complaint is the part where you're talking about Volly being a fatherly figure; it's too much in the present sense, and that tends to be somewhat disruptive.
Would you mind reviewing my story, Kingdom Crossovers? I could use some feedback.Author's response
Well, I put that part in there to describe him seeing as he's kinda an important part of the plot structure! Do you think I should have put that in a different part where he a bit more prominent? And of coure I'll read and review your story!
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