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Xanthic Growlithe Contract
(#) KitsunenoRai 2007-04-10
It's an interesting start. It did have great details in the forest area though. It's just a bit short for me. Also, you didn't capitalize any of the pokemon in the forest. It's a bit slow, but then again what first chapter isn't.Author's response
^^ Yeah, the first few chapters are pretty short.
I don't capitalize pokemon species actually. I don't think it's grammatical, and I think capitalizing it just makes things more confusing whenever a pokemon isn't nicknamed.Xanthic Growlithe Contract
(#) St_Elmos_Fire 2007-04-21
Good story. I didn't really like the opening, but I did like the bit with Elliot.Author's response
Well, the rest of the story is all about Elliot, so no worries there!Xanthic Growlithe Contract
(#) IWCT 2007-04-24
I know I've already given you reviews for chapters 1-5 on this piece, but I'd just like to throw my hat in the ring in response to KitsuenoRai on the capitalization thing.
Names of species (common name or Latin) are not capitalized in English. No one would type "then the Human turned around," or "the Cat jumped to the roof." Unless an author was cruel enough to name a random stantler "Stantler" there is no reason to capitalize pokemon species.
Other than that, I'm glad you're switching over from FF.N, or at least expanding the reading base. I'd forgotten how short the early chapters were.
Also, is the tense switch between the scene with the "sallow pokemon" and Elliot's little hike intentional, and supposed to tell the reader something? Or did you just forget that you were writing in the present tense?
As always, I love how you point out the incongruities of the games versus real life. Reading the first chapter brings me back to when I first read "Xanthic" (I really shouldn't have started with
"Johto" first, though. That was a mistake on my part), and it clicked, and I grinned.
I'm still trying to figure out what Xanthic means, off and on. No luck yet, but I'll keep trying until you give it away for the rest of us lesser mortals.
=^.^= IWCT (MorriganFearn on FF.N)Xanthic Growlithe Contract
(#) IWCT 2007-04-24
I know I've already given you reviews for chapters 1-5 on this piece, but I'd just like to throw my hat in the ring in response to KitsuenoRai on the capitalization thing.
Names of species (common name or Latin) are not capitalized in English. No one would type "then the Human turned around," or "the Cat jumped to the roof." Unless an author was cruel enough to name a random stantler "Stantler" there is no reason to capitalize pokemon species.
Other than that, I'm glad you're switching over from FF.N, or at least expanding the reading base. I'd forgotten how short the early chapters were.
Also, is the tense switch between the scene with the "sallow pokemon" and Elliot's little hike intentional, and supposed to tell the reader something? Or did you just forget that you were writing in the present tense?
As always, I love how you point out the incongruities of the games versus real life. Reading the first chapter brings me back to when I first read "Xanthic" (I really shouldn't have started with
"Johto" first, though. That was a mistake on my part), and it clicked, and I grinned.
I'm still trying to figure out what Xanthic means, off and on. No luck yet, but I'll keep trying until you give it away for the rest of us lesser mortals.
=^.^= IWCT (MorriganFearn on FF.N)Author's response
^^ Hi again! Yeah, I'd even forgotten how short they are. And I'm more expanding than switching.
The tense is different because the two scenes aren't concurrent at all, so I wrote the prologue very differently. (Although I originally did intend to write the story in present tense, but changed my mind.)
Xanthic... ^^ Only one person's figured it out so far. (Reading a dictionary would help.) But even if you did figure it out, it wouldn't completely make sense yet.
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