Categories > TV > NUMB3RS > Family Ties
(#) BlackCat_of_Hades 2007-05-22Yeah, hm, 'kay...Didn't anyone ever tell ya it's not nice to end it at a cliff hangery thing and then make me wait for an update?! That's just not cool man! I should send my new kitten after you! Seriously though this is a really good stories and I'd really, really, appreciate it if you updated it like really really really soon...within a week would be nice. anyhow keep up the great work! :)
(#) sirrah-chan 2008-06-27I like this one. The plot setting is similary to my own favorite thoughts and i'm anxious to read more. I'm actually waiting for the serie writers to relise the same you and I have. That some smart crooks would deffinetly see how useful Charlie could be to them...
But until that, I just enjoy my own thought and this fic of yours. Please continue soon ^^
(#) sirrah-chan 2008-06-27I just found the rest of this on fanfiction.net
From the third chapter I had an ugly feeling that I knew where this was going on. Unfortunatly I was right. In a show like Numb3rs, where the main characteristic and theme is the family, you cant go and mess with that.
The plot idea was stupid. There is no chance Alan would have done something like that. He didn't have a reason. I couldn't even finish the last chapter, it was so absurd. A slight OOCness is understandable, since we all see the characters differently but this...
It doesn't make you a good mystery writer if you make a person do something he would never do. Of course no one suspects him to be the one, since we all know he could not do something like that. So please, warn people ahead. I understand if you've had this idea "what if Alan is actually biter for the brothers for stealing his wife from him" but please, state so in the begginning and do not try to write all mysterious... cause if you do, the fic just end up bad.
(#) charlieeppes 2008-07-16It's a great start so far. I can't wait until you put up the next chapter. You might want to use the spell check though, because I have noticed some spelling errors. Also, don't let the negative reviews bring you down. Not everyone is going to like everything that is written by everyone.
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