(#) dansemacabre 2007-06-03Well done! I particularly liked the part where Elizabeth (at least, I assumed it was her) mentions "the rest of her" and Darcy's pen stops moving. It tied in very nicely with the closing too, framing Darcy's daydream to perfection. Excellent finishing line about how the ink had sunk into the fibers.
Author's responseThank you. I tried to pack a lot into this little 'fic and it's nice to know people've picked up on it.
(#) snail_mail 2008-01-10Good job. It must have been difficult taking on the wonderful characters of Jane Austen. You did a good job of giving justice to her work.
The transition from daydream back to reality confused me a little and I had to read back to realize that it was a daydream. You may take that into consideration next time for easier understanding. But then again, it might just have also been me being slow.
Author's responseNo, other people have mentioned trouble with the transitions too. If you're slow, then so are they.
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