(#) jerseygirlxx 2007-05-31I still think the last one that says I remember 'the week' dosent fit right... Each other reference is to a specific moment in time. I think thats what makes it so powerful. Little moments in time. Thats all we are. But 'a week' sounds like too long. Id change it to be more specific. Make it a specific felling or moment. The more specific the better. (I remember the feel of his kiss; or I remember the look in his eye as we stared out the window. he wanted to go home blah blah... ) I dont know theres so many ways and you've done an amazing job on this....
Dont EVER write in your summary that you dont think your writing is good!----xoxo
Author's responseuhhh, ill think about it but i dont really get how to change it..
thanks for your comment glad u liked! =)
(#) MCR_dynamite 2007-05-31That was seriously sad and beautiful! It was really sweet all the way through it and brought tears to my eyes. I love the way you wrote it. How you put at the beggining of the memories, I remember when...and at the end, I was -- and he was --
I absolutely loved that story!!! -Jessie xox
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