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by Togot 1 review

Ever have a day where everything goes wrong? For Derek that is every day and he wants to end it. There's just one problem, it seems that he can't

Category: Humor - Rating: R - Genres: Humor, Sci-fi - Warnings: [V] - Published: 2007-06-19 - Updated: 2007-06-20 - 2825 words

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The Suicidal Immortal 2

(#) Ithilwen 2007-07-19

The officer "patted" him down. Checking for weapons, not adding protective gear.

Oho I can picture that sweet hour-long rant! What a delight after a tiring day!

A large gutted man is a big guy who's been disemboweled. A large-gutted man is a man with a large gut.

Your/You're, etc.

Once again, visual and highly funny. I don't quite follow what the last line is about, though.
Author's response
corrections made, and the last line might make more sense if you read it again, specifically the part when his supervisor talks about the lady getting killed. not aware of surroundings is ups's copout for everything. thanks for reading and enjoy the other two new chapters

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