Categories > Original > Horror
- :O that guy is evil, saying that it was maybe a test..damn that's a horrible thought.. but why was the boy there? What's going onnnn?? lol, very well written, the way you described the blown out brain and that evil guy has a strong character..if you know what I mean!
Author's responseSo my dear, would you live or die? grins evilly And danke bows
- Excuse the language but fuck.
THat's harsh...Really harsh. And when you say would I live or die, do you mean would the dude come back and shoot? Probably. After leaving the prsoner in the room with the corpse for about...ooh, say a week?
Author's responsenods It was meant to be harsh but thanks
(#) Darkenchanter 2007-07-01I'd live, but feel truly terrible about it.
Pretty cool story, I love how you built up the suspence and emotion throughout, and ended on such a sick note (which, I'll admit, made me chuckle slightly). It was kind of strange how you set the story with the reader as the protagonist, but after a few sentences I got used to it and it worked really well.
One thing that could be improved was possibly seperating the paragraphs out a bit more to make it a little easier to read, it seemed a little squashed together and non-too-nice to look at.
If you make any more original fiction (especially horror), I'll be sure to check it out, cause you've got my interest!
Author's responseThank you bows And I'm glad you liked the way I put the reader in the character's shoes, smiles That's what I was aiming for.
And thanks for the advice as well, it seems to happen alot now that people review but don't be critical about it, I'll bear that in mind.
Thanks again smiles I'll probably attempt a sequel
(#) MyVengefulRomance 2007-07-04I don't...I can't...uhhhh...
I don't know what to say. I don't know what I'd do in that situation, either. I'd probably refuse to answer and get both of us killed. Or I'd use reverse psychology or something.
But, really, I'd just get both of us killed.
But, geez. I was gaping at the screen, unable to comment.
Great job, butt-head. sniffles You're gonna make me cry! (Just kidding...not really...)
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