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Whippoorwill
6 reviewsThey say when you hear a whippoorwill it means someone is going to die. (light shounen-ai, concrit appreciated)
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Whippoorwill
(#) Ryuko 2006-01-01
Very nice! I really did enjoy that story. It was sad, thought-provoking, and almost romantic. The only thing that I could ever say was wrong is that you sometimes seemed to go a little off topic. But not by much.
By the way... I accidentally clicked "funny" when I was rating it. I wanted to hit "moving". x.x Sorry. >.< is a klutz
Author\'s Response: That's okay. XD Thanks for the comments. ^^Whippoorwill
(#) armourdude 2006-03-07
Ok I had to stop and go throught it to figure it out. Ah I get it video game characters! Then it made sence well at least more sence. That being said it was an interesting exersize in writting and well done in my opinion considering the subject matter.
Author\'s Response: Yes, video game characters. That's why it was under the Star Fox section in the games category of FicWad, you know. =3 Thanks for the comments. ^^Whippoorwill
(#) sparky_lurkdragon 2006-03-19
I don't know the StarFox characters very well, but this still managed to give me a sad feeling. Poor guys.
If I may slip into Grammar Ninja mode for a sec, though, you do have a few problems with hyphens and dashes in this story. See, if you're using a dash as a pause, you put a space before and after the dash – like this. Otherwise, you get 'words' like "happened-how", and I'm not sure that's what you were going for. :)
Just a little blip on a sad, moving fic. Good job!
Author\'s Response: Meep, thanks for pointing that out! It was originally on ff.net, and I had it as one of those long dashes (I forget what they're called, but they basically look like two dashes together), which is how Word makes them, and they must not have copy-pasted correctly here. Thanks for reviewing!Whippoorwill
(#) Chase_the_Cat 2006-05-07
OMG... SO SWEET... I really liked it. I'm not Fox/Falco or anything, but that almost conviced TO be. ^_^ Very well-written, I likey!!!Author's response
Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. ^^
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