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Broken Angel
(#) ShadingInGrey 2005-05-16
This is a very strong poem tackling a difficult subject. I think you made a good use of rhythm, and I love 'kiss the sky'.
I think, if you want a suggestion, some of this could be developed a bit more so it's stronger, eg., 'I won't let you believe in lies.'
However, this is a great piece!Author's response
thank you, tania. ><
i appreciate that you took the time to read and suggest. but when i write and finish a poem, i hardly change it after. i guess i want to look back on it sometime and see how my writing style changed, you know. but thanks for reviewing. it means a lot to me. ^^Broken Angel
(#) Sindeniirelle 2005-06-08
Very beautiful. The imagery and atmosphere are absolutely breathtaking. It manages to be beautiful and tragic at the same time.Author's response
aww. thank you.Broken Angel
(#) jackskellington 2008-03-27
Simply beautiful. I can picture so easily in my mind. You have detailed this poem with such passion and sympathetic reality. I love it VERY much.
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