by sweethatred 2 reviewsbased on a true event. poem narrating the thoughts of a girl who loved a boy so much. too much, that she took her own life.
Category: Poetry - Rating: PG - Genres: Angst, Drama, Romance - Published: 2005-05-10 - Updated: 2005-05-10 - 380 words - Complete
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i liked the poem some of the lines were a little weriod and you could try reworking them. i also did not like the last line it felt like it just droped you emotionaly, and i think you could add something to that part. it has potentional.
(#) kia 2006-03-12
An interesting little piece, although suicide has been done quite a few times. Your syntex was a little off, perhaps if you sat down and just rewrote it...let the words flow out a bit more. All in all it was moving, even if "Cuz" slightly ruined the romantic mood. I hope this review was helpful! :)
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