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A Bitter Betrayl
(#) Shobs 2006-02-17
A beautiful poem. The only part I can think to critise is the repeated use of "ripped" in the last lines. It takes away from the effect, a bit.
Author\'s Response: Thank you haha I didn't even realize that I had done that. You are right. I changed it, it shouldnt sound so repeatitive now. thanks!
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