(#) ilovemikey 2008-01-12Wow. Just wow.
They're so cute! And... wow.
I loved the twenty-fourth of a second when they were on the phone- you wrote it really well. Screw that, you wrote the whole thing really well.
Please update again soon, I'm dying to know what happens now. You left it at about the time I started hyperventilating... not fair!
I continue to be stunned by your writing.
(#) Disenchanted 2008-01-13Fuck, ahhhhhhhh! I can't stop smiling. Seriously, I look like the Cheshire cat or something. This was such a cute chapter. So many things made me laugh and go, "awwwww". Seriousy, amazing job. I'm gonna put down some minor mistakes and some of my favorite lines. The first one because I'm a nitpick, and th esecond one because I'm just cool like that.
"Gerard starred at the name..." I think it's supposed to be stared.
"He could smell Fran’s cologne." Frank's cologne, right?
Okay that's it, only really small mistakes. The writing was perfect, I swear.
"If he didn’t pick up now, he would miss the call. Frank would think he was avoiding him. He’d live alone on the streets forever, begging for change and prostituting himself for money while the harsh, cold winds ripped at his skin." Oh gosh, my favorite line! I laughed.
"The mirror was his best friend, and his reflection was his worst enemy." That is a really good line. Loved it!
“Ithinkyourlaughiscute.” I think everyone loved this. Adorable!
You're an awesome writer...
Author's responseWow, thanks. And thnks for pointing out those pesky typos. x_x My laptop's keys stick, and even when I re-read my work, I still miss some of the errors. So thank you!
(#) MCR_dynamite 2008-01-26:D This story is awesome, seriously!! I love it! I think it's great how you put yourself in the story, but just as a friend, not as someone who gets with one of them. Even though cliches are okay sometimes, I prefer reading/writing stories that aren't cliche. As you know from reading my hospital fic (thanks again for reading and reviewing!!!).
Cause there are too many stories out there where the author falls in love with one of the My Chem guys whilst they're in high school.
But yeah, this is awesome!!!
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