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Bella Rising
(#) DrT 2008-01-20
Harry should watch those vows, and if that vampire (familiar to Neville, huh?) if who we are being led to believe it was, Blaise will soon be missing whatever genitals he/she is sporting
"T"Author's response
Thanks, as always, for reading and reviewing. Yep, gotta watch them vows doncha' know?
The vampire is actually Eliza Shakespeare, and she is not a happy camper. We've seen the genteel side of the vampires so far - I think the time has come to show the other side.Bella Rising
(#) Geovanni_Luciano 2008-01-20
This was a decent chapter, however, it was a bit short. I would have been more descriptive with the last scene with Harry and Hermione, and would probably have even added a flash of blue to seal the magical oath from Harry. The bits with Blaise need to be more descriptive. With Transgendered characters you've really got to go for the shot value of them in great detail because it's has a real magnetic appeal, especial amongst homophobes. I've received alot of reviews in regards to my treatment of my Ron character in Season of Hell in his transformation there where people were literally asking me to use magic in them as apposed to being so graphic in describing the situation. Now all you need is an incredible shrinking member for Blaise whom is desperate to counteract the effects, finds a solution which has setbacks in twice the reduction once the potion wears off. SMILES. Update soon.
Geovanni Luciano.Author's response
Okay, this is just scary. I have written a scene where Blaise can't "perform."
So you have a severely conflicted quasitranssexual who is frustrated to boot.
I based the scene on someone who has an increased dependency on Viagra, the more he takes the more he needs to take to get the same result.
I guess great minds think alike. . .
I like the idea of the "Incredible Shrinking Member," I may use that if I have your permission.
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(#) Coolone007 2008-01-20
Yeah i would love her if i was harry but i would not trust her. She modified her parent memory and just told him about this. What else has she modified for the better of all?Author's response
Thanks, again, for reading and reviewing.
Yeah, Hermione is a little too handy with that memory charm. Of course the precedent has been set in DH, where she mind rapes her parents -- for their own good, of course.
The point is she feels really, really bad about it so I don't think it'll be an issue in the future.
Then again, if she has a teenaged daughter and she doesn't like her dating the son of Draco. . .
I see a story here.
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(#) AmberDragonfly 2008-01-21
Ditto Coolone's comment, how can Harry trust her after this.
Fatal flaw if you ask me.
Loved the birthing scene - sounds like some stuff I've heard in L&D!Bella Rising
(#) Wonderbee31 2008-01-22
Really great part here, and Hermione is a...vocal Mum to be(hope they used silencing charms on that tent, LOL), and Harry, bless his heart, is willing and able to forgive, because he has honest love for her. Funny enough, Ron also seems to love her for being herself as well, but he's figured out what I saw in OoTP, that when it comes down to it, Hermione will always be there for Harry(until she got lobotomized in book six). Blaise is going really full bore in wickedness, but looking forward to when it all comes crashing down on him/her, and wondering who the leader of his downfall will be. Looking forward to the aftermath of the birth later on, and to see if that vow will come back on Harry, and whether he'll care or not(me, I don't think he well, as Harry will love his child no matter what.)Author's response
Thank you for reading and reviewing. You're right about Harry, the way I write him is very forgiving - better to be forgiving than proud and lonely IMHO.
The wizard's vow MIGHT come back to him, somehow. . .
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