Categories > Original > Mystery > The wanted man
this chik was followed and she flips out and they finaly catch him in the end
-1Illiterate
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The wanted man
(#) sheik24 2006-02-03
Well, Jeff so far so good
hope you add to it Oh and one more thing you need to clean out your email inbox it getting full really quickThe wanted man
(#) hobbeth 2006-05-27
I don't know how old you are, but if you are old enough to post on this site, you are old enough to have a grasp of the mechanics of writing. But it doesn't show in this story. Your spelling, lack of paragraphs, punctuation, flow, and changes in verb tenses - among other things - all combine to prevent any interest in the narrative.
There is no rhyme or reason for what happened. It is as if you wrote some sentences in the box on this site, didn't check it for errors and posted it without thinking.
If you just felt like writing something, and don't care about your readers' enjoyment, then type it into your computer, or hand write it, and don't publish. If you do care, then show your respect by working on it, and making it better.
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