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Harry and KiKi: Tales of the Boy Necromancer
(#) minerdude 2008-04-14
tThis is good. I wonder how long it will take KIKI to let Harry know that Scabbers is a humanAuthor's response
only prob is diff houses so it will happen though before canon for sure.Harry and KiKi: Tales of the Boy Necromancer
(#) Wonderbee31 2008-04-15
Heh, interesting part on the train, and looks like Ron may be known of, but not a friend if he keeps up with the way he's acting. Will be fun to see the havoc Harry, Hermione, and especially Kiki will wreak this year.Harry and KiKi: Tales of the Boy Necromancer
(#) Meteoricshipyards 2008-12-17
I like this story, but am confused by a number of things.
Does Kiki actually talk? How big is she? When Ron and the others don't see her, is she infant, toddler, kindergarten, or what size are they not seeing.
You could use a beta. There are sentences with too many verbs and some with incorrect words. You're style is difficult enough, and I think a bit too obscure in places, but it mostly works.
But the story is good, and I'm enjoying it.
Thank you, and good luck with it.
Tom A.Author's response
Kiki does not talk or at least not anything more than a squirrel chattering. She is about three feet tall at the moment.
I wouldn't mind a beta but no one has volunteered yet. Examples of the problems so I can correct them would be appreciated.
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