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Battered Hearts
(#) PerfesserN 2008-04-26
Wow,
Nice, almost sedate little story - nice ambiance piece - and then WHAM!
Did anyone expect the twist at the end of this chapter?
I'll be more watchful in the future, and will resist the urge to read the last paragraph first. . .
I'm guessing the Cognivore (CogKaroff?) got tired of being subtle?
Write on, write on!Author's response
Does that mean I can have my Beta reader back? These past two chapters have been hard to write and revise solo.
GGBattered Hearts
(#) whatareyouevensaying 2008-04-26
Poor Paul just can't seem to catch a break. Aside from that, I have to say that I found this chapter to be disappointing. It jumped from an incredibly rare natural disaster to a slightly irritating folksy solution to the problem. Still love the story, if it makes you feel any better.
Looking forward to more.Battered Hearts
(#) Cateagle 2008-04-27
Nice touches, here, with a comparatively sedate chapter that binds Hermione and Harry closer together, yet, as well as binding them to the Hawaiian Islands (I can see them eventually moving there). Sigh!! You have to feel sorry for Paul, he just can't get away from that nasty cognivore and I suspect that's going to make life "interesting" if/when Hermione returns to the place she shared with Ron for so long. If a controlled-Paul attacks this time, I rather suspect the cognivore is going to be in for a very nasty surprise. 'Twill be interesting to see if the rogue cognivore is captured and appropriately dealt with (I'd interrogate it completely, if I could, and then shove it through the Veil).Battered Hearts
(#) radiofishlip 2008-08-21
this story is great...
i love your style but i have to say i wish the chapters were longer (apparently im greedy)
oh well im waiting patiently for more
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