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• A Twisted Timeline

  (#) eliew 2008-05-06

  Er.. something feels off about this chapter. First was how the stairs disappear, and the students fallen onto empty air, to be crushed by the reappearing stairs, rather than falling to their death from the height. Unless those crushed to death were actually hanging for dear life along the side, with no one helping to pull them up.
  
  2nd, no matter how strong Harry is and how much gold he waved under the goblins' nose, shouldn't the headmaster have a greater control over the castle?
  
  One last bit, not so much regarding the chapter alone, is that it seem this will be a luna/harry fic. Was hoping for a Harry/Hermione >.< or even a harem, but guess i just have to bear with those parts that i dun like.
  
  Overall, a nice story, though this chapter was a little different, with all the poor innocents as victims, rather than the wrongdoers getting their come uppance only.

• A Twisted Timeline

  (#) mathiasgranger 2008-05-06

  The whole Luna thing feels rather forced in the story. Doing the same thing as Rowling and developing the relationship off screen for the most part is a bit of lazy writing in my opinion.
  
  Looking forward to the rest of the story.

• A Twisted Timeline

  (#) LuLingQi 2008-05-06

  ok so a few things wrong or ignored, if it is a due to the death then won;t it be difficult for voldermort to get information form harry when he is dead, and the whole genocide thing not my cup of tea

• A Twisted Timeline

  (#) Cateagle 2008-05-06

  That was an interesting chapter. I thought that was a deious idea on Tom's part; a shame for him that it didn't quite work as well as he'd expected it to. Now, the next chapter should be really interesting with the duel and whatever the Ministry is up to. I admit, I'm going to be rather interested in seeing how Harry undoes the damage Riddle and the clone have done to his name. Of course, I'd be tempted to let them find a fake corpse and resume life under a new name.
  
  I do hope he's managed to thoroughly vanquish Tom this time so that he can't return. Of course, that'd leave the sequel to deal with the picking up and how matters evolve from there; which could have several twisted aspects.

• A Twisted Timeline

  (#) Wolfric 2008-05-07

  Well off hand I'd say the elixer doesn't kill Harry if your contemplating a sequel. Luna frequently acts like a bolt out of the blue, so I don't find that too out of character. I enjoyed the chapter and I am looking forward to a kick-ass duel in the next one. Thanks for writing. W.

• A Twisted Timeline

  (#) whatareyouevensaying 2008-05-07

  Bit tough to rate this chapter overall, since I'm not sure how to feel about Blaise's death and Luna's role in general. Oh well, it was enjoyable enough.
  
  Looking forward to more.

• A Twisted Timeline

  (#) stargatesg1fan1 2008-05-07

  Good chapter. Can't wait for the final duel.

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