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• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) DarkSov 2008-05-08

  Well, as a start it's not so bad. Your grammar's good, I'll give you that, even though you forget a lot of punctuation marks and things like that. You should really look for a beta, if you want to learn how to improve your writing. It helps a lot to bounce ideas off of someone else's head.
  
  Hope you update soon,
  
  ~DarkSov~

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) apocalypso 2008-05-08

  Hmm, a decent start, I suppose. You should try to make sure that you don't use too many cliches, otherwise its as if we've read the story before.
  
  Good luck writing.

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) Dragen 2008-05-09

  Not a bad start mate, oh the ass Vernon beating Harry like he did.

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) biged78 2008-05-09

  "Through the haze of light around him, Harry stared in disgusted fascination as Vernon landed squarely on a naked, masturbating Dudley, just in time for Dudley to ejaculate on his father."
  
  That may very well be the funnies line in all Harry ficdom.
  

  Author's response

  omg! My roommate is SUCH A PERV! She came up with that line and told me I had to use it. lol, I'm glad you liked it.
  
  Thank you for your review.

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) GryffindorDragon 2008-05-09

  Nice start.

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) Cateagle 2008-05-09

  A pretty good start that definitely catches the readers' interest. Looking forward to seeing where you take this.

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) Clell65619 2008-05-09

  - Well that was different.

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) kreep13 2008-05-20

  I like the story. I do not enjoy your punctuation ,however the story itself is interesting and a good read. I look forward to more from you and hope you see this as a learning experience as well for your writing.

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) TxA_GunFighter 2008-05-21

  Good start. I do hope Harry is a kick ass type in this story and not everyone's whipping boy.
  
  gunny

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) SomeGuyFawkes 2008-05-22

  Well this started off cliché and isn't out of those woods yet. However, the details about Vernon's comeuppance were finally different, if disgusting. ;-)
  
  Point of fact: Harry was not born at exactly midnight and magic would not follow the Gregorian calendar year anyway.
  
  Also Vernon's injuries should be fatal and he could not go through a wall without a severe impact on at least one stud.
  
  You do get major points for a Kickbutt!Harry (if this story holds true).
  
  

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