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• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) DavidMPotter 2008-05-14

  I look forward to Harry and Fleur finishing their talk. Maybe he could bring her home.

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) HarryGinnyTonks 2008-05-14

  interesting. The HarryFleur interaction was a bit too sappy, fairy-tale for me.
  Two suggestions:
  1 - try to avoid in-chapter author notes. They really break up the rhythm of the story.
  2 - I noticed a bit too many exclamation marks. From what I have seen, they really shouldn't be used other than to emphasize dialogue (i.e, "Get away from her!") Exclamation marks in battle description tend to make me feel as if it is less mature writing. Periods do their job well; trust them.
  
  Good chapter, try to lengthen them, as I enjoy longer chapters where I can really sit down and enjoy it.
  Waiting for the next chapter, good luck writing!

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) skytime12 2008-05-14

  finly action
  that is good fit seen keep going

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) slashslut 2008-05-15

  i think you've found your literary mojo! good action and good chapter length. i liked your fic from the beginning but i can already see big improvements in your plot development and writing style. keep up the good work. im looking forward to the next update!

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) TxA_GunFighter 2008-05-21

  Good chapter, some times you have to kill to protect others. The bad guys have all the choices and leave yu with few choices. Anything that happens to them because of that is THEIR fault. Loose no sleep over killing them.
  
  gunny

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) Geovanni_Luciano 2008-05-25

  I liked it. Good action scene. AGAIN I will complain about the length so please make a note of my complaint. That said, I also think that you might want to expound upon Harry's training with Merlin. You came up with some good stuff, but you didn't really go into too much detail as to his training.
  
  Geovanni Luciano

• Harry Potter and the New Powers

  (#) da-man 2012-07-29

  A bit to many exclamation marks, but other than that very good. Oh you keep spelling Merlin's name wrong. You spelled in merline lol. Still impressive work.

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