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Just a fluffy, fun one-shot that popped in my head! H/G fluff, Book 4 spoilers!
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Harry Potter....and the Amusement Park?
(#) HarryGinnyTonks 2008-05-17
cute story. whats the name of the song, sounds familiar, especially the second verseHarry Potter....and the Amusement Park?
(#) Cateagle 2008-05-19
Nice one. It's good to see a gentle story with them merely enjoying themselves and each others' company.Harry Potter....and the Amusement Park?
(#) SomeGuyFawkes 2008-05-22
Meh. Sappy but not terrible.
Has more than it's share of typos and that fourth-wall-breaking stuff should be avoided.
You should also spend 20 seconds with Google rather than bollixing up simple details or breaking the fourth wall.
Harry Potter....and the Amusement Park?
(#) alchemist1806 2008-05-22
Try not to leave author's notes in the middle of the story, give them out at the end...makes the work look better. Also rereading your work before posting it allows you to remove silly mistakes in spelling and grammar.
As for the rest, mushy stuff. Its not my cup of tea but whatever suits you fine...
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