(Spoilers for the second movie)What would happen if Susan was allowed to stay in Narnia?(rated for lime) Caspian x Susan
omg, as soon as i saw the movie i thought by myself: wouldn't it be great if she would stay with caspian.
and now you're making this story.
This is a major revision to Lewis' canon, but it's a logical change that other authors have also gone after.
The problem is that you need a longer story to justify the changeover. If this were the right length it would be +1 Moving. As it is, that is canceled out by -1 OOC (Aslan is _never_ surprised and does not make mistakes). So no rating points either way.
If you want to see this handled better, try "And You Shall Receive" by Anne Walsh, http://annewalsh.trycanta.com/fics/And_Ye_Shall_Receive/1
I really liked this - pls write more! I also like the fact that you've shown how Aslan can make mistakes (he is not perfect, even in the books). And it is certainly the ending I would have preferred for the film.
I like this :) I know tou wrote it yearrs ago but continuing would make my year!!! Love it and it would've been better is susan had stayed XP
ASLAN IS JESUS!!! ;)
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