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Lecacy of Jafar:Book 1 The Beginning
3 reviewsThis story is mainly about jafar but has some of the other charaters.Sorry about putting Wil as a main charater.
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Lecacy of Jafar:Book 1 The Beginning
(#) Anime_Girl 2008-06-05
Marshello, I can't wait until Ike and Soren show up >.< hurry up and get to that point!
Some helpful critism:
Next time, let me edit your story before you post it, I realized I made mistakes with mine, but I'm good at editing other people's crap. And put it in paragraph form, seeing it all together like that is a big turn off, it makes it look reeaaaallllyyy long and boring. Plus, details are essential, add a little more of those, but the words should flow. (Look at me giving advice yet I can't write myself -_-") Good luck, Marshello!!!! :DAuthor's response
Everyone,
I will put it in paragraghs next time sorry about that
Anime Girl
Thanks for the advice.
See you all soon,
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(#) zullo3 2008-06-07
Get writing I can't wait to read story #2. The Battle of Senfew. Will there be a plot twist!!Lecacy of Jafar:Book 1 The Beginning
(#) Wolf_of_the_Anbu 2008-06-09
MARSHALLO!!!! WOOOOOOOOO! WAY TO GO!!!!! but please put paragraphs. it gets confusing without them.
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