- I'm loving the look of this story. It's a really good idea-one I've never heard of before.
I'm glad that Bob is going to be more in the front of this story, there are hardly any stories with much of him in. You've prtrayed the characters all really well. A little biit of constructive critiscm-after someone speaks, try and put their name in afterwards cause it gets a little confusing.
Elisabeth sounds like a complete bitch but Madison sounds like she might be sort of okay.
Like I said, this story is going in the right direction. It's awesome already.
Loved it so far, update soon.
Author's responseHi there,
I'm glad you're loving the look of the story and think it's original.
I know what you mean about Bob not being in the forefront of a story. Actually I have two other stories on here where Bob is the forefront To Save a Life and it's sequel The Life You Created. Both again are different from anything on here that I know of. Only if you wanted to read another Bob forefront story.
I'll definitely look out for that however I don't think it's really necessary for one on ones as much. Thanks for the constructive criticism.
Yes it does seem that Elisabeth is the bitchy one and Madison is better. But we'll see.
Thanks for your comments and here is an update where the girls meet the band.
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