- I'm really, really enjoying this story! I didn't expect the Harry/Daphne angle (I'm almost exclusively an HHr shipper), but you've done a great job with this and I'm very impressed. The writing is tight and well thought out and you've done a great job with the story line. It moves and flows honestly and there are no jagged points or glaring omissions that make the story uneven.
SO - please keep writing!
- CLIFF HANGERS!!! GRRRRRRRRRRrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr!!!!!
Still????? Makes for a perfect setup for a tremendous blow off.
Perfect time for "Harry James Potter-Black" to announce himself and demand satisfaction, on:
1. Dumbledork gets all his behind the scenes control revealed;
His and Weasley's Mother and younger children's plans, betrayal and theft shown with the help of the goblin's;
and, Dumbledork finally gets to find out how Moldishorts died and can be offered the chance to experience it too (others have hidden problems by transfiguring it into something else, simple and small; nice time to reverse it).
2. Harry now has Daphne's contract, bet Goblin's could show it as signed shortly after originally received;
Daphne's father would really in trouble since he would have interfered with the courtship, and has helped arranged her rape while she is effectively under Harry's protection.
The father and Count who did the rape could be arrested,
it is revealed that Harry now owns ALL the pairs debts, now called due, then they are challenged (speciously fun if its after Harry has revealed the death of the dark lord and done something about dumbledore).
Not trying to write your story, just like being evil on occasion. Thanks for the chance.
Also thanks a VERY GOOD read, I definitely looking forward to seeing where you go with this.
May the MUSES always be with you!!!
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