- I really like the beginning to this story. I have read many of your other stories, but this one has the best beginning as far as I am concerned. Heh, as idiotic as Dumbledore is, I think you should write a story where Dumbledore, in an attempt to control all of the magical world, and eventually the whole world, tries to run for parliament, or, in the alternative, president of the U.S. I bet you could have some fun with that. However, right now, I am more interested in seeing where you take this story. Keep up the good work.
- This is pure gold.
Harry as a Sinanju, Death Eaters are toast.
Also like how you have Dumbledore bouncing between incompetent for his position and a manipulator.
This version of the Twins and their Slytherin rivals was nice. Too bad with it being sixth year that it is unlikely to have much of them.
Harry using the 37 steps on Tonks is pure WIN. Hope to see more of that or at least the effects of Tonks having been driven out of her mind with pleasure. Though with her being a metamorph Harry might have added a few new things to the steps.
More soon please.
- Lovely start. How much of his father's attitude has Harry picked up? We see some of it in his remarks to Dumbledore. He is probably not going to be too impressed with Hogwarts, its teachers, or its students. He may make exceptions for the prettier females. I wonder how he would react to Snape's comment about 'arrogant as your father'? Would he think of Chiun and be offended, or complimented?
Author's response- It's not arrogance when you can do it.
(#) glrasshopper 2008-09-12Good work. It sounds like it is definitely going to be an interesting year at Hogwarts. I wonder how they are going to get Sirius out of Azkaban?
One question though: why Fleur? Come on now, I can understand Ginny, but Fleur?! Krum was the expendable one not her!
Author's response- I haven't decided if Harry's going to make a mention of Sirius. More than likely he'll end up being freed quietly after Harry kills Pettigrew.
- It needed to be Fleur so that I could have a joke to come later when Harry finally meets the reborn 'Dark Lord'...
- Fantastic job, once again. You truly have a talent for spinning really great story.
My only whine is that you have once again STARTED to write a really great story. You have more fantastic stories in progress than almost any other writer has (finished or not). If you were a bad, average, or even merely good storyteller, I wouldn't care. But your stories are engrossing, and I can't just forget them. I keep worrying you'll turn out like Robert Jordan and Robert Adams, and die with multiple stories unfinished.
Please, as much as I love this story, please write more on your open ones before you start another great story that will stall out. Then, when you have finished these, you should write a story of your own, to publish and sell. Your talents are truly wasted as an electron herder.
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