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Portals, Steam and Magic

This is a rewrite of Steampunk Potter.

Category: Harry Potter - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Fantasy - Characters: Harry,Hermione - Warnings: [!!] - Published: 2009/08/05 - Updated: 2009/08/06 - 6471 words

Reviews

• Portals, Steam and Magic

  (#) adrianbdean 2009-08-05 11:27:47 PM

  I like this story and it's concept, but from reading this and comparing it to the other story I am unsure as to where the rewrite occurred.
  
  Nonetheless, like I said, I like this story and look forward to more updates and hopefully a finished product this time around.
  
  You do need to work on your spelling, grammar, and story formatting because I believe this will diminish the number of people that will read your story.
  
  Because it is a creation of your own views of Victorian England when combined with the Magical World, I don't think you will have to worry about any mistakes dealing with the British gentry and such.
  
  Overall, keep up the good work.

• Portals, Steam and Magic

  (#) DarQuing 2009-08-06 09:20:04 AM

  I haven't read the original so I'm not able to compare the two, but so far I'm liking this story. :)
  
  Please update soon! :)

• Portals, Steam and Magic

  (#) HJHOWE 2009-08-06 10:32:50 AM

  I agree with adrianbdean but still would love for you to continue. I must say yiou need a beta and to have the formating errors checked.
  
  I would beta for you if you need me to.

• Portals, Steam and Magic

  (#) OreganoOreo 2009-08-13 05:11:05 PM

  I haven't read the other story, but I am enjoying this. Please continue.
  
  And I agree with HJHOWE about maybe getting a beta.

• Portals, Steam and Magic

  (#) DJ32 2009-08-13 05:48:06 PM

  I loved the first one & this one is just as good Please continue. I look forward to more soon Please thanks for sticking with it.
  

• Portals, Steam and Magic

  (#) The_Resident 2009-10-16 02:19:57 AM

  If you intended to fix spelling and grammar along with the plot/storyline, I am sorry to say you failed. You need and editor to correct your spelling (yours is atrocious) and grammar errors and a beta to make sure your characters are in character and you are actually following the storyline you mapped out (/You did map out the storyline, didn't you?/) and to aid you with geographic references, et. al.

• Portals, Steam and Magic

  (#) Cateagle 2010-02-14 08:00:01 AM

  This does flow a bit smoother and is an enjoyable read; I'm quite enjoying it. It does need a bit of a run through a beta as there are spelling errors as well as the occassional dropped word, forex. "...Hermione Potter, nee." should be "...Hermione Potter, nee Granger.". Still, it's an excellent concept that you're developing nicely and I look forward to more.

• Portals, Steam and Magic

  (#) dougal74 2010-02-14 11:06:55 AM

  An interesting concept and I look forward to seeing the story develop. But, for a rewrite your spelling and grammar are rather poor.
  
  For example:
  
  'cased' should be 'cast'
  'trail' should be 'trial'
  
  Those are two of many errors throughout the chapter.

• Portals, Steam and Magic

  (#) ficbob 2010-02-16 07:49:40 AM

  Glad that you are continuing this fic. And Dumbles getting pummeled by Harry for failing Hermione is priceless.

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