- Good chapter, there, and I loved how Harry managed to answer Molly's questions without annoying her; I suspect she'll start working with Ginny to redirect her at some other wizard (Look out, Neville!). It's good to see matters progessing fairly smoothly between Hermione and Harry; that should make for some interesting times later on. That new wand and Harry's other abilities are going to alter the correlation of forces more than I suspect anyone realizes (have to wonder how Dumbledore will react to the changes in Harry and his relationships). I'll definitely looking forward to future chapters.
(#) aredphxbird2 2010-04-27Good chapter,I wonder if Malfoy an the others escape a guilty verdict at thier upcoming trial.I like to known what will his excuse is this time around.I wonder if Harry has an reason to hex the Malfoy males along with Fudge and make Narcissa a slave of some sort.Did he give those other captured DEs the same treatment?awaiting next update.
Author's responseLucius and those others are most sincerely dead!
- Thanks for the great chapter Dr T! That hex will really help the gene pool! Hmmmmm....he'd better hit the toad as well; it's unlikely that she'd reproduce but why take the chance. I also liked seeing how Harry dealt with Molly, but she might try and push for her chosen pairings after "grooming' Ron and Ginny. Perhaps the DE's might start worrying that something nastier is looking for them now.... Harry's doing a nice job of balancing his actions and knowledge to take care of Voldy and his other problems. Perhaps Fudge will take the fall with his dear friend Malfoy!
Author's responseRE: Umbridge
-Insert Beavis/Butthead Laugh-
Toad baseball, not frog baseball. . . (anyone who doesn't know it Beavis & Butthead pilot can find it on Youtube)
- A narrative style isn't bad but I'd like a few more scenes where the characters can flex their emotional muscles a bit more!
As Harry & Hermione have definitely hooked up I wonder about your statement of Harry being involved with more of the Hogwarts Heroines?
I hope Luna Lovegood is one and maybe the only other!
Author's responseI think your criticism is totally correct -- this isn't a big detailed epic as I used to write. Too much on my plate, but I hope you enjoy this somewhat more paired down story
- The thing missing in this story is conflict. Harry got a major powerup in brains, knowledge and skills while the rest of the cast are at the same level JKR made them so that a stupid protagonist would have a chance to win by luck. Also, Harry has future knowledge that is still valid, making everything infinitely easier.
By telling instead of showing, I can write a story with this premise and have the whole thing wrapped up in a single chapter. But it would be boring!
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